On the Beach
This is a real story that I experienced when I was a young girl. It is the most unforgettable and horrible happening that occurred to me on the beach abruptly and instantly. I was almost dead on the beach. I have never had such a desperate feeling in all my days since I was born. It was hot summer day and my family was on summer vacation on the beach as we usually do in summer. The beach was full of people and everybody including my family was enjoying the beautiful scenery of the sea and joyful feelings. We sat down on the beach and ate a watermelon and foods for lunch. Everything was fun and perfect before I jumped in to the sea.
After lunch, I wanted to swim in the sea riding on the waves because riding on the waves was the most exciting thing that I could do in the sea. When I jumped into the sea the waves became bigger and bigger and the large waves made me fun. Suddenly, huge waves came over to me and I thought that this wave could make me more exciting. But it was totally wrong idea. The gigantic waves swiped over my body and I swept under the wave. I couldn’t breathe and figure out what was going on to me. I was in a panic. I struggled to reach my feet under the sea, but I couldn’t. I went too far from the beach because of the huge waves. The next time, I realized that my tube punctured and I lost my hat that my father gave to me for my birthday present.
I tried to swim toward the beach, but I couldn’t because I was afraid of death. The sea was too cold and dark. My mind was full of frustration and fear. Suddenly, I could die if I didn’t try something to survive. I started to find something that floated on the water. And I found a floating small mattress in the sea and I tried to grab that mattress. I started swimming with the mattress. It was hard to swim because of the waves, but I made a great effort to survive. Finally I reached the beach safely.I told my parents about that accident which occurred to me and my brother tried to relieve me. Since then, I swear that I’m going to pay attention when I jump into the sea again. 
Based on the real experience, your descriptions made the story very vivid and real. Like I was also standing there and watching everything happened when the accident occured. Besides, I really like the pictures you put in your story, especially the picture of a lot of hands. And the ocean blue color of your cover also matched well with the story's background.
ReplyDeletei really like your story and your pictures.
ReplyDeleteyour story is from your experience. thats why i like more^^
the last picture show us the climax of your story.
in the last picture, left side is your parent and right side is you .
that makes me imagine how scare you are at that time.
After being told and reading your story, I really could feel how you felt in that situation. I think the pictures that you clipped out of magazines are so helpful to imagine it. Plus, I like the structure of your story, which attracts readers' attention, I think.
ReplyDeletemy cousin had a similar experience as your story,thank God both of you were able to make it alive.I have learnt some new things in your story with water.
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